This is a seventh draft (earlier drafts went back to 1994), the second rewrite of a sixth draft, and is pretty much the basis of the 2002 version of Closetspace. This script differs quite a bit from earlier drafts of Closetspace as the sixth draft was completely rewritten from scratch. While some scenes exist, others were completely rewritten and others deleted.

Many scenes were moved around, most were greatly expanded. Dad was named Jack, Mother had been named Molly. The Dad/Carrie confrontation is now Carrie-driven. Unfortunately, while writing this draft, I moved to Pennsylvania and forgot about it until June of 1997, when I began work on it again. Once we were laid off, I left the draft unfinished. Material significantly changed or added to this draft from the 5th Draft is in bolded font.

		
Closetspace
"Roommate Wanted"
Written by Jennifer Dolari with Dov Sherman.
Drawn by Jennifer Dolari
(c) 1997 Jennifer Dolari

PAGE 1 - EXTERIOR - PARK - DAY 
        PANEL 1 - An OLD MAN cranks an antique Gramophone in the park, but
        instead of an old vinyl record playing an even older ragtime number,
        there is an enclosed CD playing loudly through the large funnel
        speaker.

        PANEL 2 - The Old Man looks up over to two older women, WOMAN 1 and
        WOMAN 2, feeding pigeons in front of a statue spewing water high into
        the air. Woman 1 is slim and short haired, Woman 2 is a bit bulkier,
        with longer wavy hair. The two look very content, but are also a bit
        stiff, as if they have been waiting too long in the cold wind for
        someone. Snow gently drifts down from above.

        PANEL 3 - The Old Man smiles to himself, happy at seeing such fine
        "young" women on exhibit in the park. The ragtime music continues to
        play from his CD/Gramophone.

        PANEL 4 - Woman 2, turns to talk to Woman 1, who continues to feed
        the pigeons absentmindedly.
                        
                        WOMAN 2
                        (slightly
                        irritated)
                It's been over an hour...she's
                not coming, is she?

        PANEL 5 - Woman 1 turns to face Woman 2 with a look of surprise.

                        WOMAN 1
                Patience...patience.

PAGE 2 - EXTERIOR - PARK - DAY (CONT.)

        PANEL 6 - Woman 1 goes back to feeding the pigeons. In the
        background, a hover car flies past.

                        WOMAN 2
                It's too cold for me to be
                patient.

        PANEL 7 - The old man looks up as WOMAN 3 runs into the frame. She's
        about the same age as Woman 1 and Woman 2, somewhat short, with
        straight as an arrow hair, wearing very dark clothes and a necklace
        consisting of a talon holding a black obsidian ball. She's very happy
        over the notebook held under her arm. Woman 1 seems very happy to see
        her!

                        WOMAN 1
                        (ecstatically)
                SWEETIE!!!

        PANEL 8 - Woman 1 jumps up, hugging Woman 3 with all her might, Woman
        2 simply looks up with a slight smile.

        PANEL 9 - Woman 1, held almost romantically by Woman 3, looks
        expectantly up at Woman 3.

                        WOMAN 2
                Mmmm...hiya, sweetie.

        PANEL 10 - Woman 3, kissing Woman 2, blindly drops the notebook into
        Woman 2's unexpecting hands.

                        WOMAN 3
                        (off panel)
                Enjoy...mmm....


PAGE 3 - EXTERIOR - PARK - DAY (CONT.)

        PANEL 11 - Woman 2 opens the book and is happily surprised by what
        she sees. Woman 3 is still holding Woman 1, who is nuzzling her neck.
        
                        WOMAN 2
                        (happily)
                My god! You found it!

        PANEL 12 - Woman 3 sits next to Woman 2 as Woman 1 clings lovingly to
        Woman 3.

                        WOMAN 3
                        (pointing
                        to Woman 1)
                Not really...she made sure I had
                doubles of all your old prints.
                So when you lost them, I always
                had copies...
                        (beat)
                ...I simply never bothered to
                look for them until it was too
                late.

        PANEL 13 - The book is open to the first page, on it is a picture of
        CARRIE, a young shapely woman with short light reddish hair in a
        respectful "cheesecake" shot.

        PANEL 14 - Woman 1 looks into the picture book with a slight smile. 
        
PAGE 4 - INTERIOR - BEDROOM - DAY

        PANEL 15 - Inside of a stark white room, with boxes strewn around,
        sits AMY, a slightly chunky young alternative/goth girl with shoulder
        length straight hair. She's supremely pissed at her roommate,
        ALLISON, who is standing behind her, obviously worried about her
        roommates attitude.
                        ALLISON
                Was it something I said?
                Something I did?

        PANEL 16 - Amy tries her best to talk calmly and regain her composure
        as she turns around to talk to Allison. She keeps her eyes closed,
        afraid that even SEEING her would cause her to fly into a rage again.
        
                        AMY
                        (deadpan)
                You should be a little more
                honest with your roommates.

						ALLISON
                        (obviously

                        worried)
                Honest? What haven't I been
                honest about?

PAGE 4 (CONT.) - EXTERIOR - OUTSIDE OF HOUSE - DAY

        PANEL 17 - The outside of Allison's shared household is a somewhat
        plain two story building, typical of the kind found in Suburbia USA.
        In the driveway as a red convertible, with it's top down and boxes
        littering the backseat and trunk. Amy is putting another box into the
        backseat as Allison looks out to her from the front patio.

                        AMY
                It means I've found your
                pictures....

        PANEL 18 - Amy turns to face Allison who is halfway to her car.

                        AMY
                        (cont.)
                ...and now I know who you are.

        PANEL 19 - As Amy turns back to her car, Allison looks down in shame.

PAGE 5 - EXTERIOR - OUTSIDE OF HOUSE - DAY (CONT.)

        PANEL 20 - Amy looks up, shocked as Allison puts her hand on Amy's
        shoulder. Allison looks up again, past Amy's shoulder,
        apologetically.

                        ALLISON
                If you'd just let me explain. I
                think we'd be able to--

        PANEL 21 - Amy swivels around, slapping Allison hard.

                        AMY
                        (shouting)
                DON'T TOUCH ME!


        PANEL 22 - Amy turns back to her car, grabbing her keys.

                        AMY
                I'll come back to get the rest
                of my stuff as soon as I can
                stomach the idea of ever seeing
                you again.

        PANEL 23 - Allison watches Amy peel out of her driveway. Allison is
        far away, worried and pensive all at once.

        PANEL 24 - CLOSE UP of Allison's worried face.

                        ALLISON
                And rent's due in a week....

PAGE 6 - EXTERIOR - ANOTHER HOUSE - DAY

        PANEL 25 - Looking down at a modest suburban two story house, we see
        a family station wagon beginning to pull into the driveway. In one of
        the windows we see a young fifteen year old girl, BECKY, bending over
        another silhouette.

                        BECKY
                        (off screen)
                Here, try a little of this...

PAGE 6 (CONT.) - INTERIOR - BECKY'S ROOM - DAY

        PANEL 26 - Becky and CARRIE, who is wearing the same outfit as in the
        picture, are staring into a mirror connected to a desk splayed with
        cosmetics. As Carrie tries on a shade of lipstick, Becky looks at
        Carrie's reflection with an artist's eye.

                        BECKY
                I don't know...that shade looks
                a little too purple for your
                skin tone.
        PANEL 27 - As Becky turns to Carrie to check her makeup, the window
        behind them shows the station wagon parking in the driveway

                        CARRIE
				Purple? There's purple in this?
                Where?

                        BECKY
                You men...you can't see any
                colors at all, can you?

        PANEL 28 - Becky "poinks" the tip of Carrie's nose with a jabbing
        finger. Her other hand is reaching for a camera on a nearby
        nightstand.

                        BECKY
                Even the ones who like dressing

                like women.

        PANEL 29 - Carrie looks back into the mirror, finishing up her
        lipstick with a different color.

                        CARRIE
                Cut me some slack, Sis. At least
                I'm trying to DO something with
                my looks.

PAGE 6 (CONT.) - EXTERIOR - DRIVEWAY OF CARRIE'S HOUSE - DAY

        PANEL 30 - DAD, a strong burly man with short cropped hair gets out
        of his car. A strong military man, he stiffly gets out of his car,
        with the straightest posture known to man, holding a toolchest of
        immense proportions in his right hand, and a bucket of "Grandma's
        Fried Chicken" and a gallon of Ice Cream in his left. Staring up at
        Becky's window, he sees his lovely daughter. He smiles proudly at
        her.

                        BECKY
                Well then, you'll need to learn
                more than color co-ordination
                and makeup. PAGE 7 - INTERIOR - BECKY'S ROOM - DAY

        PANEL 31 - Becky is now holding out the camera, waiting to take a
        picture of her "sister." Becky looks a little unsure about this whole
        predicament and the uneasiness is vaguely showing on her face. Her
        words are wavering and unsure

                        BECKY
                So...you're as good as I can
                make you.
                        (beat)
                You sure you wanna do this?

        PANEL 32 - Carrie is impatient, she's been waiting for this picture a
        long time.


                        CARRIE
                        (excitedly)
                Yes! Yes! YES!

        PANEL 33 - Carrie through the viewfinder of the camera.

                        BECKY
                One...two...hold tight...

        PANEL 34 - This panel takes up the rest of the page. This is the
        picture from PANEL 13, expanded out to fill the frame.

                        BECKY
                        (off screen)
                Three!

PAGE 7 - INTERIOR - KITCHEN OF CARRIE'S HOUSE - DAY

        PANEL 35 - Dad happily kicks the door closed, causing a loud bang and
        some pottery to fall to the floor, shattering.

PAGE 7 (CONT.) - INTERIOR - BECKY'S ROOM - DAY

        PANEL 36 - Carrie and Becky hear the loud crash and look towards
        their own closed door in surprise.

                        BECKY AND CARRIE
                        (surprised)
                DAD!

PAGE 8 - INTERIOR - BECKY'S ROOM - DAY (CONT.)

        PANEL 37 - Becky bolts up as Carrie slowly rises. She seems to be
        thinking something over, as if it's time to get something off her
        chest to her family. Becky, however, is busy trying to save Carrie's
        butt.

                        BECKY
                        (hurriedly)
                Jason, get that crap off your
                face before Dad sees you!

 						CARRIE
                Becky...maybe I should tell them.

        PANEL 38 - Dad puts down the bucket of Grandma's Chicken on the
        kitchen table...he's got a warm smile for such a huge Herculean man.

                        BECKY
                        (off screen)
                ARE YOU NUTS?!

                        DAD
                        (loud and proud)
                KIDS?!

PAGE 8 (CONT.) - INTERIOR - CORRIDOR OUTSIDE OF BECKY'S ROOM - DAY

        PANEL 39 - Becky's head is popping out of Carrie's door with an
        extremely fake smile plastered on it.

                        BECKY
                Be right there, Dad!

PAGE 8 (CONT.) - INTERIOR - BECKY'S ROOM - DAY

        PANEL 40 - Carrie looks in the mirror despondently as Becky tries to
        ramrod some sense into her. Becky is almost downright angry at her
        for even thinking such a thing as telling Dad.

                        CARRIE
                No, really, Sis. I think it's
                time I told Mom and Dad.

                        BECKY
                You do that and we'll BOTH get
                in trouble, and you know that.

        PANEL 41 - Dad comes lumbering up the stairs to his kids bedroom.
        He's holding a gallon of Tin Roof Ice cream in one hand.

                        DAD
                        (loudly)
                BECKERS! SON! GOT SOMETHIN' FOR
                YAS!

PAGE 9 - INTERIOR - BECKY'S ROOM - DAY

        PANEL 42 - Becky tears back for the door, talking down to Carrie.

                        BECKY
                You just get the hell outta that
                outfit and say "Hi" to Dad, or
                he'll get suspicious.       
                
        PANEL 43 - Carrie, worried, thinks over the proposition.

PAGE 9 (CONT.) - INTERIOR - CORRIDOR OUTSIDE OF BECKY'S ROOM - DAY


        PANEL 44 - Becky runs towards dad down the hallway, arms outstretched
        like a five year old.

                        BECKY
                Daaaaaaaaaaadddddddyyyyyyyy!!!!!

        PANEL 45 - The Ex-Marine picks up his daughter with one hand,
        propping her on his shoulder like she was only a five pound sack of
        sugar.

                        BECKY
                        (sweetly)
                How was your day, Daddy?

                        DAD
                My day? Well...

PAGE 10 - EXTERIOR - EMPTY CLEARING IN THE WOODS - DAY
        PANEL 46 - A group of local Veterans of Foreign War members stand
        around the foundations of a clubhouse ready for building. The members
        are ad-libbing "...where's Jack?" "He's got all our materials!" and
        so on.

        PANEL 47 - A particularly OLDER MAN, wearing a cap embroidered with
        the Vietnam Duty Ribbon points of in the distance. To him , it's as
        if Superman has come over the ridge.

                        OLDER MAN
                It's HIM!

PAGE 10 (CONT.) - EXTERIOR - HILLTOP NEAR CLEARING - DAY

        PANEL 48 - Dad (Jack) stands triumphantly up the hill, with a
        stackload of wood held under each of his arms. He stands before them
        a superhuman warrior, with the entire sky replaced with Old Glory
        herself.

PAGE 10 (CONT.) - EXTERIOR - CLEARING IN THE WOODS - DAY

        PANEL 49 - With ungodly speed, Dad runs into the clearing, leaving a
        speed streak behind him.

        PANEL 50 - There is now a "cloud" of dust among the mob as Dad works
        on the new hall.

PAGE 11 - EXTERIOR - CLEARING IN THE WOODS - DAY

        PANEL 51 - As the dust clears, Dad stands in front of the new hall,
        doing an American Gladiator's pose. The hall is exquisite, finely
        detailed in architecture Frank Lloyd Wright would be jealous of, and
        is topped off with a large "Legion of Foreign Wars #322" sign
        overhead.

        PANEL 52 - The Older Man and the throng behind him raise their hands,
        fists, crutches, and flags in a cheer to the new hall and Dad.

        PANEL 53 - Dad holds the door to the new hall open and ushers the
        members in.

PAGE 11 (CONT.) - INTERIOR - CORRIDOR OUTSIDE OF BECKY'S ROOM.

        PANEL 54 - Becky, still sitting on her father's huge shoulder, looks
        skeptical as Dad finishes his story

                        DAD
                And THAT is how today went.
                        (beat)
                Now let's go get your brother.

        PANEL 55 - Becky looks worried as her jovial father reaches for the
        door to Becky's room.

                        CARRIE
                In here, Dad....

        PANEL 56 - Becky and Dad both look shocked at the sight they see in

        Becky's Bedroom

        PANEL 57 - Carrie is still deep in thought, and mutters a meek...

                        CARRIE
                Hello, Dad... PAGE 12 - INTERIOR - NEWSPAPER EDITOR'S OFFICE - DAY

        PANEL 58 - A large burly man dressed in a button down shirt with it's
        sleeves pulled up, and a poker visor over his face. He is a
        quintessential NEWSPAPER EDITOR and he's taking a call for an ad. He
        seems to be concentrating hard, as if the newspaper presses in the
        background a bit too loud for him to hear effectively.

                        EDITOR
                So, that's "Single White Female,
                seeks Single White Male for
                roommate to share heating vents?
                Needs one months tent trumped
                up?"
                        (beat)
                Sorry lady, we're a family
                paper!

PAGE 12 (CONT.) - INTERIOR - ALLISON'S LIVING ROOM - DAY

        PANEL 59 - Allison, with a resigned look on her face, as if swatting
        flies from her face that never seem to go away, is arguing with the
        Editor. It seems to be a losing battle.

                        ALLISON
                No! They're both female...
                        (beat)
                BOTH!

        PANEL 60 - Allison leans back in her chair. According to her

        expression, the battle is turning her way.

                        ALLISON
                Right...no..."ROOM and RENT!"
                Yes...Yes...
                        (beat)
                That's "one month's rent up
                front!"
                        (beat)
                "Front!"

PAGE 12 (CONT.) - INTERIOR - NEWSPAPER EDITOR'S OFFICE

        PANEL 61 - The Newspaper Editor no longer seems to be paying any
        attention to Allison on the other end, but is reading tomorrow's
        headlines. The headline on the paper reads "Drug Use on Rise."

                        EDITOR
                Okay, that'll be $100 for two
                weeks run...
                        (beat)
                Charge it to your account?

        PANEL 62 - The Editor swivels around to an old dilapidated computer
        screen, pulling up an even more ancient database.

                        EDITOR
                Oh, you're that lady who runs
                all them interior decorating
                ads, ain'tcha?
                        (beat)
                Okay, it's been charged...you
                know you've got quite a bill
                charged up here already...

PAGE 13 - INTERIOR - ALLISON'S LIVING ROOM - DAY

        PANEL 63 - Allison looks dismayed, as if she wants to end the phone
        call quickly...which she does.

                        ALLISON
                Yes, and thanks to those ads,
                we'll have it all paid off in
                the next few weeks.
                        (beat)
                Yes...thank you...goodbye.

        PANEL 64 - Allison hangs up the phone on its cradle, looking down at
        the table. On the table are two pictures, the contents we cannot see
        or are blurred.

        PANEL 65 - POV from under the pictures up to Allison's face. Allison
        picks up the pictures, with a saddened look. 
        
        PANEL 66 - POV from above, Allison buries her head in her hands, the
        (VERY UNDETAILED) pictures before her.

PAGE 13 - INTERIOR - CARRIE'S KITCHEN - DAY

        PANEL 66 - POV shot is the same as 65, but now we have an enraged
        Carrie, both fist stubbornly down on the table. Carrie has removed
        all her make-up, but still has her "hair." Her Father has assumed the
        same position across from her, and the mother is gently sobbing on
        one side of the table.

                       CARRIE
                        (enraged)
                Well, I think it's about time we
                faced facts!!

        PANEL 67 - Dad shouting at Carrie, from the left of Carrie over to
        the Dad.

                        DAD
                        (howling)
                The fact is the I will not have
                any of your faggot friends
                turning you into the sissy boy
                they want you to be!
                        (beat)
                If I so much as HEAR their queer
                voices ANYWHERE around you
                again, there'll be hell to pay

                outta YOUR hide!

        PANEL 68 - Reverse Angle. Carrie's shouting at Dad, from the right of
        Dad. Mom sits in her spot sobbing and coughing quietly.

                        CARRIE
                        (furious)

                Isn't that just the problem, Dad?
                It's MY problem to deal with,
                not my FRIENDS, not YOURS. It's
                MINE!

        PANEL 69 - Becky listens in from the cooridor leading into the
        kitchen.

                        DAD
                        (off screen) And it's mine, too! If word ever
                got out that I have a faggot for
                a son... 
                
        PANEL 70 - Carrie gets realization, a cooler head, and an idea.

                        CARRIE
                Then it gets out. Besides, it's
                no longer your problem...

PAGE 14 - INTERIOR - CARRIE'S KITCHEN - DAY (CONT.)

        PANEL 71 - Carrie spins about walking away from the fight. Dad is
        reaching out to Carrie's shirt.

                        CARRIE
                I'm moving out. 
                
        PANEL 72 - Carrie gets roughly pulled onto the top of the table. Dad
        is lording over him, fist clenching Carrie's shoulder, pinning her
        down. Mom has rised up is shock.

                        MOM

                        (fearful)
                JACK!

                        DAD
                        (vengeful)
                YOU ARE NOT GOING ANYWHERE.

        PANEL 73 - Dad tosses Carrie one-armed into a wall, where she lands
        with a thud. Mother is now racked with more sobs and coughs.

        PANEL 74 - Dad is standing over Carrie. Carrie is slumped in a
        sitting position on the floor, looking up at him defiantly. Becky
        looks on from the cooridor.

                        CARRIE

                Well, at least now I have good
                reason to leave...

        PANEL 75 - From the cooridor, looking out on the kitchen, a weary
        Carrie walks down. Father is oblivious to Becky's presence, and
        interested in only shouting at him. A tearful Mother has pulled up
        near Becky.

                        DAD
                You leave and you'll never see
                us again. I MEAN IT.

                        CARRIE
                If it means being away from you,
                then it's worth it.

        PANEL 76 - Over Carrie's shoulder to a very worried looking Becky and
        Mother. Father has turned his back. Carrie is pleased to hear mother
        speak.

                        MOM
                Be careful out there, son.... 
                
PAGE 15 - INTERIOR - ALLISON'S LIVING ROOM - EVENING

        PANEL 77 - Allison opens the door to a very PLAIN WOMAN. She is
        dressed primarily in black, but has a gold cross necklace and brown
        shawl.

                        PLAIN WOMAN
                Hello, my sister. I've come to
                enquire about your advertisement
                for a roomate.

        PANEL 78 - Allison invites her in.

                        ALLISON
                Yes, please come in!

        PANEL 79 - The plain woman examines her surroundings on the way to a
        chair in front of a coffee table with a beautifully blooming set of
        flowers on it.

                        PLAIN WOMAN
                What an ornate palace you have
                here. Surely you have sampled
                heartily from the Lord's bounty.

        PANEL 80 - A someone confused Allison replies.

                        ALLISON
                Well, yes. I'm a small-time
                interior decorator...I figure
                if my house looks bad, it's not
                good for business.

        PANEL 81 - The Plain Woman turns on Allison, looking deeply into her
        soul. Allison is dazed, confused and comedically pained as she
        realizes this is not the roomate for her.

                        PLAIN WOMAN
                But surely such baubles are here
                to fill a truly empty void in
                your soul.
                        (beat)
                Tell me, Have you accepted Jesus
                Christ as your Lord and savior?

PAGE 16 - INTERIOR - VICTORIA'S LIVING ROOM - EVENING


        PANEL 82 - VICTORIA, a somewhat large black woman, with jet black
        straight hair, is joyfully talking to Carrie and Becky, both sitting
        on a very tacky couch. In fact, the entire house is very tacky. She
        is dressed up as a very exaggerated version of Columbia from the
        Rocky Horror Picture Show.

                        VICTORIA
                Of COURSE you can stay here,
                sweetcheeks! Stay as long as you
                need!
                        (beat)
                It's about time you moved out of
                that straight laced hellhole and
                into this old drag's house.

        PANEL 83 - Becky and Carrie stare at each other nervously.

                        VICTORIA
                        (off panel)
                Hell, we can have dress up
                parties and makeovers and
                slumber parties.  It'll be
                GREAT!!

        PANEL 84 - Victoria "fashionably" walks out the door with a cheecky
        goodbye.

                        VICTORIA
                But I gotta go now, they're
                having a one time showing of the
                Rocky Horror Picture Show at
                Chez Armand! And I'm gonna be a
                star!

        PANEL 85 - Becky and Carrie give a worried look at an exiting
        Victoria.

                        VICTORIA
                Just don't trash the house while
                I'm gone!

        PANEL 86 - Becky and Carrie star at each other again, worried.

                        CARRIE
                I think I'll be needing to find
                a new apartment.

        PANEL 87 - Becky reclines on the sofa as Carrie examines a hanging
        crystal chime with a burning white candle underneath.

                        CARRIE
                You won't get in trouble with
                Dad for being with me, will you?

                        BECKY
                Nah, Marlene is covering for me
                by telling Dad she's having a
                sleep over.  She'll just tell
                Dad I'm in the bathroom or
                something.

PAGE 17 - INTERIOR - VICTORIA'S LIVING ROOM - EVENING


        PANEL 88 - Carrie moves onto a small cup of powder.

                        BECKY
                You know, I really admire you
                standing up to dad the way you
                did.  Mom does, too.

                        CARRIE
                Lotta good that did. All my
                stuff is at home and I've got
                nothing.

                        BECKY
                Oh, please, the Security Center
                pays well, and you've got a roof
                over your head.

        PANEL 89 - Close up of Becky's mischevious grin.          BECKY
                As for your stuff, you leave
                that to me.

        PANEL 90 - Allison sits across from the PATRIOT WOMAN, a large strong
        muscled woman with a Teamsters shirt on the front and a pin of the
        American Flag on her collar. Allison looks uninterested in what she's
        saying.


                       				PATRIOT WOMAN
                And that's how the Trilateral
                Commission has hounded me for my
                shoes over the past three years.
                They NEED my DNA strands from
                the toenails, since those
                reproduce the best clones of
                people.

        PANEL 91 - Allison looks up into the cieling.

                        ALLISON
                        (thinking)
                Give me strength!

PAGE 18 - EXTERIOR - BEHIND CARRIE'S HOUSE - NIGHT

        PANEL 92 - It's dark and Becky is sticking out of her two story
        window, speaking to KEVIN, a burly hunk of a boy who is swooning over

        Becky in her nightie.

                        BECKY
                        (whispering)
                You ready?

                        KEVIN
                        (whispering)
                We are...are you?

                        BECKY
                        (whispering)
                Just take the boxes and deliver
                them to the address I gave you.

        PANEL 93 - Kevin points forward towards an open darkened windows.

                        KEVIN
                GO!

        PANEL 94 - The Entire Earl Rudder Middle School Football team
        assembles together the bottom 1/3 of a ramp leading up to Carrie's
        room.

        PANEL 95 - The middle 1/3.

        PANEL 96 - The final 1/3 is completed and about twenty footballers
        run up the ramp.

        PANEL 97 - Twenty men run down with a HUGE load of boxes.

        PANEL 98 - The ramp disassembles.

PAGE 19 - EXTERIOR - BEHIND CARRIE'S HOUSE - NIGHT (CONT.)

        PANEL 99 - Becky leans out to talk to Kevin.

                        BECKY
                Thank you!

        PANEL 100 - Kevin looks up with stars in his eyes.

                        KEVIN
                As Quarterback for the Earl
                Rudder Middle School football
                team I declare that we are at
                your disposal!

        PANEL 101 - Becky herself is struck by the dreamy stars.

                        BECKY
                Men....

PAGE 20 (CONT.) - EXTERIOR - BEHIND CARRIE'S HOUSE - NIGHT

        PANEL 102 - The Patriot Woman has been replaced by a HIPPIE CHICK.
        She's wearing unkempt bedraggled hair, a crystal on a necklace and
        very dark shades (probably covering up her bloodshot eyes).

                        HIPPIE CHICK
                ...it should all be really free
                and unheavily cool. I mean that's
                why I asked if the drugs would
                bother you...

        PANEL 103 - The Hippie Chick has been replaced by the AIRHEAD. She's
        obviously not all there, is wearing too much make up and not enough
        personality. Too much jewelry and fingernails the length of small
        skyscrapers.

                        AIRHEAD
                ...and when it didn't bother
                Raoul, like, I told him that I'd
                just be going to the mall for
                another pair of shoes and, like,
                he just freeeked! You know how
                it is, boys just don't understand!

        PANEL 104 - The Airhead ahs been replaced by a TREKKIE in full
        Starfleet Regalia, Spock ears. she is also unbearably fat and
        possibly even a bit sweaty.

                        TREKKIE
                I mean, if we DO understand the
                Prime Directive, we simply
                CANNOT get involved in the
                internal affairs of primitive
                peoples...

        PANEL 105 - The Trekkie has been replaced by HEIDI, a dominatrix in
        leather with a cat-o-nine tails whip in her hand. she is sensuous,
        beautiful and perhaps even a bit charming. But the collar with the
        lock on it shatters the innocent look on her face.

                        HEIDI
                ...and my affairs are anything
                but primitive. Pain and
                pleasure, pleasure and pain...
                they both dance forbidden
                dances, slowly intertwining
                their waltzes until both are
                one. And they both grow in
                intensity until...

        PANEL 106 - The Dominatrix has been replaced by a Trucker Woman.
        Typical un-feminine looking woman in flannel and ski-vest. Very
        muscular and probably a bit unhygenic, too. The centerpiece is dead.

                        TRUCKER WOMAN
                ...that chunk of ice on the
                compressor was as big as my
                fist!  Damn near was blockin' so
                much of the pipe, that the air
                hoses were chokin' on it. PANEL 107 - Allison looks up in disgust.

                        ALLISON
                        (Sigh.)

PAGE 21 - INTERIOR - VICTORIA'S HOUSE - VARIOUS LOCATIONS - NIGHT

        PANEL 108 - Victoria puts a needle on a record.

        SONG: LITTLE BLACK DRESS (runs inderneath all panels).