This is a fourth draft of the
original 1994 script. The only major change I can remember from the third
draft was removing a line about dad "whipping your backside" if he
ever saw any of Carrie's friends, giving the Sister character the name Becky, and renaming the character of Veronica into
Victoria. Several Veronica and Sister tags made it into this draft, but were fixed
when I typed this script up for the website.
Closet Space #1
(c)1993, 1996 Jennifer Dolari.
Original Story by Jennifer Dolari.
To be adapted by Dov Sherman with Jennifer Dolari.
Artwork by Dov Sherman.
PANEL 1 - An overhead shot of Jason's house. It's midday.
Here, try a little of this....
PANEL 2 - BECKY and CARRIE are staring into a mirror. There's cosmetics all
over the dresser. Carrie is trying on a shade of lipstick. Becky looks at the
reflection with an artist's eyes.
I think that shade is a little
too purple for your skin tone.
PANEL 3 - Carrie turns to Becky. Through an open window, you can see a car
pulling into the driveway.
Purple? I don't see any purple
in this at all.
You men can't see color at all,
can you? Even the ones who want
to look like women.
PANEL 4 - Carrie looks back into the mirror.
Cut me some slack, Sis. At least
I'm trying to DO something with
PANEL 5 - DAD gets out of his car with a Bucket of Grandma's Chicken. He's
looking up to Carrie's window and sees Becky in it.
Well then, you'll need to learn
more than color co-ordination and
PANEL 6 - Carrie is wiping off the lipstick. Becky comes closer to Carrie's
ear over her shoulder.
So when ya gonna tell Dad, Jason?
When I'm like this, my name is
Carrie, sis. . not Jason.
PANEL 7 - Dad is putting down the box of chicken on the kitchen table, and is
looking up in the direction of his kids with a smile.
What do you mean 'like this?' You
know underneath he padding and
make-up your still my brother.
PANEL 8 - Surprise!
KIDS! I'm home!
PANEL 9 - Becky rushes for the door.
You get all that junk off, and
I'll head him off.
PANEL 10 - Becky looks back at Jason's door as Dad comes up the stairway.
We got your favorite! Grandma's
PANEL 11 - Carrie tears off her blouse, revealing a padding filled bra
underneath. [Note, do NOT reveal Carrie's Face]
Be down in a sec, Dad!
PANEL 12 - Becky confronts Dad just at the stairway.
PANEL 13 - Jason is pulling up the zipper on his pants
Dad, I've got this neat new
window hanging I want you to
PANEL 14 - Becky is now sitting up on a jovial Dad's shoulder. She's
definitely worried, while Dad is extremely happy to be home anyways.
Well, then lets get your brother
and we'll get a look at it!
PANEL 15 - Jason opens the door [note: you still do not see his face.]
PANEL 16 - Becky has her head in her hands with another "Oh, shit" look on
her face. Carrie is now JASON.
PANEL 17 - Dad has a surprised and almost sad look on his face.
PANEL 18 - Jason, still with Carrie's make-up on, smiles.
What's for dinner?
PANEL 19 - The view of another, larger ornate house from overhead, there is
a car in the driveway.
DON'T TOUCH ME!
PANEL 20 - AMY is packing her stuff. ALLISON is over her shoulder wondering
What? Was it something I said?
You should be more honest with
PANEL 21 - Amy walks down a hallway with a box in her hand.
What's that supposed to mean?
PANEL 22 - Amy is placing a box into the backseat of her car, Allison is
standing in the front doorway of the house.
It means that I found your
PANEL 23 - Amy turns to Allison who is halfway to her car.
And now I know who and what you
are. And I don't think I'll be
able to anyone for a long, long
PANEL 24 - Allison reaches out for Amy's shoulder
Amy, it's not what you think...
If you'd just let me explain...
PANEL 25 - Allison swivels around, slapping Allison hard
PANEL 26 - Amy turns back to her car
And I don't think I could trust
you ever again.
PANEL 27 - Amy is in her car, which has started.
I'll come back for the rest soon.
PANEL 28 - Allison watches as Amy drives off.
Great.. .and rent's due in a
PANEL 29 - Jason, the make-up is off, but the hair is still Carrie's. She's
very subdued and hurt.
And if it weren't for those
damned queers you hang around
with, you'd be a sane and normal
as Mother and I!
Dad... it's not like that
Don't talk back!
PANEL 30 - Establishing shot. In their Kitchen, Jason's Father is on the left,
Jason's MOTHER on the right. Jason is standing behind a table in between his
parents. The mother seems subdued.
And frankly, if I ever catch
another of your faggot friends
over, I'll make sure they live
to regret it.
PANEL 31 - Dad begins to turn away from Jason, who is starting to get
Now stop being an embarrasment to
the whole family and get yourself
ready for dinner.
PANEL 32 - Jason stares hard at dad.
PANEL 33 - Dad turns his head towards Jason
What was that?
PANEL 34 - Carrie faces her mother.
Mom, please... make him see that
this is really me.. .you and
Becky have known this for years.
PANEL 35 - Mother looks down at her feet, crying.
Were you talking to me?
PANEL 36 - Mother is crying, and now coughing as well. Father is even MORE
I SAID "WERE YOU TALKING
PANEL 37-39 - Jason blows up, storming at Dad to the point where even Dad is
backing up from it.
YES, YOU! I'm TIRED of listening
our bigoted homophobic rantings!
Your constant testosterone
worship! You've turned Mom into
a scared whimpering shell of what
she used to be!
You've made my life a living hell
with all your crap! A complete a
total HELL and I'm TIRED OF IT
PANEL 40 - Dad smugly looks down at Jason
As long as your in my house, you
go by my rules.
PANEL 41 - Becky peers into the kitchen from the hallway.
Then I've won. You only say that
when you can't justify your
Shut up with your psycho-babble,
it doesn't work on me.
PANEL 42 - Jason walks past a bewildered Becky in hallway, steamin' mad
followed by an enraged Dad.
It doesn't need to. I'm leaving.
GET BACK HERE!
PANEL 43 - Dad grabs Jason's sleeve pulling him back.
YOU'RE NOT GOING ANYWHERE!
PANEL 44 - Dad swings at Jason.
PANEL 45 - Jason flies to the floor.
PANEL 46 - Jason begins to get up, staring with intense hatred at Dad.
PANEL 47 - Jason stands, chest up and out, staring with intense hatred at
Now I know I'm leaving.
PANEL 48 - As Jason runs upstairs, Dad looks at his fist in disbelief.
PANEL 49 - Full Length Shot of VICTORIA...a not so convincing drag queen in
full regalia. She seems overjoyed to have company.
Of COURSE you can stay here,
PANEL 50 - Carrie and Becky look at each other nervously. There are several
boxes in the background marked "Carrie."
It'll be great! Two crossdressing
queens under one roof! We'll have
a hellacious time!
PANEL 51 - Victoria is busy getting dressed in more regalia.
Now, I've got a talent show to go
to, so we'll get all the
particulars outta the way then,
PANEL 52 - Victoriaheads out the door, giving a quick glance back as she
Now, Becky, make sure Carrie
doesn't trash the place while I'm
at work! I'll be back later!
PANEL 53 - Carrie is looking at Becky.
I definitely need to find another
PANEL 54 - Becky roots through one of Carrie's boxes
I don't know.. .Victor's always
been a nice guy, and you two have
always gotten together well...
PANEL 55 - Carrie turns to Becky. Becky is holding up a bra and looking at
Sis, you've known Victoria as
long as you've known about me.
PANEL 56 - Becky has put the bra down and is giving Carrie a look of
You need to find a new place....
PANEL 57 - Establishing shot: A very plain DEMURE WOMAN sits in a chair across
from Allison, who is looking extremely bored. A table sits between them and a
small slightly-wilting centerpiece sits on the table.
And then the good Lord led me,
like he led the Israelites, to
your roommate wanted ad.
PANEL 58 - Shot of the Demure Woman's upper torso. A bit of the centerpiece
can be seen.
And with the help of our Lord and
Savior Jesus Christ, we shall
both get what we seek in life,
PANEL 59 - The Demure Woman has been replaced with a PATRIOT WOMAN wearing a
"Born American, Born Free" T-shirt. She's a fairly rugged woman, and well
built muscularly. The centerpiece has wilted a bit.
'cause liberty is all we have
left to be free in this corrupt
government. Because the people
are the hearts and souls of
America! It's all in the
PANEL 60 - The Patriot Woman has been replaced by a HIPPIE CHICK. She's
wearing unkempt bedraggled hair, a crystal on a necklace and very dark shades
(probably covering up her bloodshot eyes). The centerpiece has wilted even
It should all be really free and
unheavily cool. I mean that's why
I asked if the drugs would bother
PANEL 61 - The Hippie Chick has been replaced by the AIRHEAD. She's obviously
not all there, is wearing too much make up and not enough personality. Too
much jewelry and fingernails the length of small skyscrapers. That centerpiece
isn't looking too good.
...and when it didn't bother
Raoul, like, I told him that I'd
just be going to the mall for
another pair of shoes and, like,
he just freeeked! You know how it
is, boys just don't understand!
PANEL 62 - The Airhead ahs been replaced by a TREKKIE in full Starfleet
Regalia, Spock ears. She is also unbearably fat and possibly even a bit
sweaty. The centerpiece is now dying.
I mean, if we DO understand the
Prime Directive, we simply CANNOT
get involved in the internal
affairs of primitive peoples...
PANEL 63 - The Trekkie has been replaced by a DOMINATRIX in leather with a
cat-o-nine tails whip in her hand. She is sensuous, beautiful and perhaps just
a bit charming. But the collar with the lock on it kinda ruins it.. Our
centerpiece is greying....
...and my affairs are anything
but primitive. Pain and pleasure,
pleasure and pain.. .they both
dance forbidden dances, slowly
intertwining their waltzes until
both are one. And they both grow
in intensity until...
PANEL 64 - The Dominatrix has been replaced by a TRUCKER WOMAN. Typical
un-feminine looking woman in flannel and ski-vest. Very muscular and probably
a bit unhygenic, too. The centerpiece is dead.
Ah managed to get the sucker off
of the main air line. Damn near
was blockin' so much of the pipe,
that the brakes were chokin' on
it. Glob of gunk the size of my
PANEL 65 - Allison ushers Trucker Woman out the door
PANEL 66 - Allison slams door, leaning up against the door. She is plainly
Oh, man. I'll be living with a
REAL crazy at this rate.
PANEL 67 - Carrie is reading a book, Victoria is dancing in front of her.
Lyrics are blaring from the stereo speakers "Look Up, Look Up, Look up! The
Sky is Falling!"
PANEL 68 - Carrie and Victoria are at the dinner table where Victoria, mouth
full, is gabbing away at her, food particles flying out.
PANEL 69 - Carrie is trying to watch TV on a tiny TV set, she has a look of
consternation on her face. Victoria is dancing behind her of her. Lyrics are
blaring from the stereo speakers "Look Up, Look Up, Look up! The Sky is
PANEL 70 - Carrie, trying to hide herself in the collars of her jacket, a very
"distinctive" Victoria, another as-distinctive friend and Becky, also trying
to hide, are walking down the street. Victoria and friend having a grand old
time, despite the strange looks they're getting.
PANEL 71 - Carrie is trying to work on a Jigsaw puzzle, but a dancing Victoria
has stepped on it. Lyrics are blaring from the stereo speakers "Look Up, Look
Up, Look up! The Sky is Falling!"
PANEL 72 - Carrie is driving in her pickup next to some guys on the freeway.
Victoria is hanging out the window blowing a kiss to the guys. Carrie has a
very shocked look on her face.
PANEL 72 - Carrie is lying in bed.. .eyes red... needing sleep... but she
can't... because blaring from the stereo speakers is "Look Up, Look Up, Look
up! The Sky is Falling!"
PANEL 73 - Establishing shot: It's breakfast and a very bored and annoyed
Carrie is sitting across from a male Victoria. Victoria is drinking a
Slim-fast shake and Carrie is eating a bowl of Kombat Krunch cereal. Carrie is
running through a newspaper's want ads. Flying through the air from speakers
are the words "Look Up, Look Up, Look up! The Sky is Falling!"
So I told her that if she though
I was going to get in that
bustier, she had another thing
PANEL 74 - Carrie jumps up from the table, covering much of Victoria's word
I mean the thing would make Kate
Moss gasp for breath! She didn't
even bother to check it on
herself before giving it to me!
PANEL 75 - Carrie shows Victoria the ad who looks up a bit disinterested.
I found a place to stay!
PANEL 76 - Victoria takes the paper to read it.
But you can stay here as long as
you need, sweets!
"Single white female, 28, seeks
female roommate to share expenses
with. Reliable transportation and
decent income a must."
PANEL 77 - Head shot: Victoria laughs a little at the situation.
Carrie, you may look great as a
girl, but as long as you have
your beans and franks, you're not
PANEL 76 - Carrie sits back in her chair.
Don't remind me...
Y'know...10 to 1 says I could
pass it off well enough to live
PANEL 77 - Victoria is getting a good laugh from this all.
10 to 1 says you couldn't live
it. Being a girl is tons
different than being a glamourous
queen. When you're one of us, you
dont have to wear make-up all the
time, and you don't have to time
your life in 28 day intervals.
PANEL 78 - Carrie is slightly offended at this.
How could you say something like
PANEL 79 - Carrie gets dreamy.
No pesky parents, no snooping
sisters, no back-asswards
relatives barging in...
No "Look up" song.
PANEL 80 - Victoria tries to shake her out of it.
Just remember not to leave the
toilet seat up.
PANEL 81 - An overhead view of Allison's house, Carrie's pickup is parked by
PANEL 82 - Establishing shot: A much relieved Allison sits happily in front of
a happy Carrie. Both seem FINALLY at ease. A bright fresh new centerpiece sits
on the table.
Well, you've definitely passed
all the requirements...now a few
PANEL 83 - Allison sits forward a bit towards Carrie.
What is your opinion about
alternate sexualities? Gays,
lesbians and everything in
PANEL 84 - Headshot: Carrie is getting sweaty and hot, even blushing a little.
SHE'S ON TO ME!
Um...I'm okay with it...one of my
closest friends is a drag
queen...uh...nope, I don't have a
problem... um...with anything...
PANEL 85 - Headshot of Allison, with a happy (perhaps a little relieved, too)
smile on her face.
That's great! You don't know how
many people I've had to let go
because they don't like my type
PANEL 86 - Allison is standing and Carrie is noticably relieved.
So, the last question I can see
is 'When can you move in?'
PANEL 87 - Carrie stands up from her chair
You mean I'm in?
PANEL 88 - Carrie thrusts out her hand for a shake, which Allison looks at
quizically. The centerpiece loses a small leaf.
THANK YOU!!! I promise I'll never
let you down!
PANEL 89 - Allison smiles and takes the hand.
Then here's to a long and
[The Book of Xand]
[The Girl in the Mirror]
[The Long Road Home]
[Manpower]||[The Many Lives
Authority]|| [Voyage of the